Sunday, September 15, 2013

The Mismatch Girl

The second alarm of 8:30 had also gone unnoticed and Shubha was still in her bed. Ma’s voice jolted her out.

“Oh God! I’m late for my music class…”

But why was she not rushing???

Silently and slowly she picked up her blue towel and went for bath. When she came out she was wearing a yellow kurti with bottle green salwar. Her wet golden brown hair were drooping on her shoulders.  She was truly alive for a new day.

Oh! but why is she wearing one white and one black footwear???

For Shubha all colours are same - Black!!!




Shiva

This piece of fiction is in response to two prompts 




2d514474-672f-49c4-929e-6b3f8dc84559_zpsbca51962


23 comments:

  1. How sad! With all the colors why did you have to make everything 'black'

    Nevertheless, its a great piece.

    ReplyDelete
  2. This is sad if all the colours are black for her. Poor girl. Nice take on the prompt.

    ReplyDelete
  3. For her all colours are black. I didn't see that coming. I thought it is going to have some funny climax. It wasn't. :(

    But a very good piece. :)

    ReplyDelete
  4. Sad for Shubha but a wonderful twist, never expected that!

    ReplyDelete
  5. Wow! Beautifully started and wonderfully ended...a very nice post :)

    ReplyDelete
  6. I liked the way you went about the post. Loved the ending specially? But is this for real? Are some people blind towards all colors?

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thanks Jini ...Basically Shubha is blind so she only sees black

      Delete
  7. Nicely written but intriguing. It makes me feel sad but happy that despite she cannot see, she is truly alive.

    ReplyDelete
  8. VIBGYOR make our life so beautiful isn't it. It is a pity when we cannot sense them. Great post.

    ReplyDelete
  9. So sad that all colors are black...still the bath brings her to life as only a splash of water can. Brilliantly written. Love the twists you incorporated.

    ReplyDelete
  10. sad but makes one ponder on our gift of vision.

    ReplyDelete
  11. Hmm I dint realise taht she was blind - maybe if you had added that somehwere in the end the story would hv had tht wow effect.

    Err jus said cause I firmly think u had such a wow story here n just tht extra line would hv made a huge diff

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. yes even I feel that I could not bring it out clearly ...Thanks for the feedback Meena..

      Delete
  12. A very emotional story, especially the ending!

    ReplyDelete
  13. Nice post, but have to agree with some of the comments, maybe it didn't have to be such a sad ending, that's all :D

    ReplyDelete
  14. nice post :) congrats on the wow badge :)

    ReplyDelete
  15. its a very touchy post. for a person who cannot understand of feel colors is something very saddening.

    ReplyDelete
  16. Oh, Shiva. So sad. I seem to be reading a lot of sad posts today! My heart goes out to her...I am colorblind. Sigh.

    ReplyDelete
  17. I loved the take. The end suddenly jolted me to a different world. And how life can be mean.

    Richa

    ReplyDelete
  18. Didn't expect the end.... :( But a good job with both the prompts!

    ReplyDelete

Thank you for dropping by...Your words are my treasure ...